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Water, so dark and deep
Pills we use for sleep

Fire, so burning and full of life
Or maybe a sharp metal knife

A gun, so deadly and beautiful
Alcohol makes you feel so dull

Love I can't feel
None of my feelings are real

I have become a shell of my former me
Blinded by darkness, I can't see

I have lost my life's spark,
I am swallowed by the dark

From my problems, I can't hide
So why not commit suicide?

But one question remain,
That I can't get out of my brain:

If I took a knife and split my head,
Would anyone weep for me when I am dead?
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animefreak310 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Student General Artist
...Beautiful. The simplicity of this is what makes it so wonderful. I feel like I can relate to this, and maybe that's why it created such an impression on me. :)
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad people like my creations. :giggle:

And thanks for the favs!
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izsleepy Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011   General Artist
Like a flame, you flicker when there's in pain, trying to make up one's mind you see? But don't blow it out just yet.
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It won't be blown out just yet, I have to empty it of all stories trapped inside of it; they are caught there, chained in fear and depressions.
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RavenousCountess Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
In poetry suicide is such a cliche subject, but I enjoy reading those things anyway. I liked how simple and 'common' the rhymes were, but they created a strong impression. ^^
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
Suicide is indeed a cliche, but it is very interesting to read about... :meow:
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x-spader-x Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
WOOAA O__O bra gjort D
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Tack! ^^
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Blitzer89 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008   Writer
the emanating negative emotion is delicious,
If I asked would you tell me the story behind this poem?
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! ^^
The reason I wrote this poem is that one of my friends here on dA have a friend that tried to commit suicide... So, you could say that this inspired me...
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