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Water, so dark and deep
Pills we use for sleep

Fire, so burning and full of life
Or maybe a sharp metal knife

A gun, so deadly and beautiful
Alcohol makes you feel so dull

Love I can't feel
None of my feelings are real

I have become a shell of my former me
Blinded by darkness, I can't see

I have lost my life's spark,
I am swallowed by the dark

From my problems, I can't hide
So why not commit suicide?

But one question remain,
That I can't get out of my brain:

If I took a knife and split my head,
Would anyone weep for me when I am dead?
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animefreak310 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Student General Artist
...Beautiful. The simplicity of this is what makes it so wonderful. I feel like I can relate to this, and maybe that's why it created such an impression on me. :)
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad people like my creations. :giggle:

And thanks for the favs!
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izsleepy Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011   General Artist
Like a flame, you flicker when there's in pain, trying to make up one's mind you see? But don't blow it out just yet.
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It won't be blown out just yet, I have to empty it of all stories trapped inside of it; they are caught there, chained in fear and depressions.
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RavenousCountess Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
In poetry suicide is such a cliche subject, but I enjoy reading those things anyway. I liked how simple and 'common' the rhymes were, but they created a strong impression. ^^
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
Suicide is indeed a cliche, but it is very interesting to read about... :meow:
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x-spader-x Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
WOOAA O__O bra gjort D
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Tack! ^^
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Blitzer89 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008   Writer
the emanating negative emotion is delicious,
If I asked would you tell me the story behind this poem?
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! ^^
The reason I wrote this poem is that one of my friends here on dA have a friend that tried to commit suicide... So, you could say that this inspired me...
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Blitzer89 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008   Writer
you say that "tried" i'm hopin you mean they failed,... plenty of my friends have tried to commit suicide,.... lucky for me,... almost all of them failed
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yep, her try to commit suicide failed... Good that they failed... But why did they try to kill themselves?
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Blitzer89 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2008   Writer
couldnt handle the embarassment, or the anger, well,.. thats my guess anyway,... im not entirely sure for some of em,... i just know that they came out alright
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Okay... Anyway, it's good that they failed...
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Blitzer89 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2008   Writer
yah,... lets talk about something more upbeat,.... soooo,..... how about 'dem marshmellows >.<
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think marshmellows is a good subject to speak about...
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Lost-souls-poetry Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2008   Writer
very well done
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And you may submit it in the club...
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morbid-angeldarkness Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2008   Writer
Brilliance
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! And thank you for the fav! ^_^
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Whogirls101 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2008
:omg:
That was an amazing poem!
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you! ^^ And thanks for the fav! =)
One funny thing is that I don't feel suicidal at all. :XD:
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Whogirls101 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008
You're Welcome! :D
That is funny :XD:
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I know! :XD:
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Whogirls101 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008
LoL :XD:
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Rosenrot93 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:rofl:
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Whogirls101 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2008
:iconoaml:
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